As we made it to the river we decided to have lunch there and maybe even try out the kayak that is sitting in the water next to us. As we just sit down we here a noise it sounds like a roar getting closer and closer to us. Next thing 2 giant bears jump out of the bush.
My family, my best friend and I start running we run and run with the baby in my wife’s hands. We run up to the boat and stumble across the paddles so my best friend and I jump up the front and start paddling why my wife is in the back keeping my daughter safe.
When we start paddling we notice that the bears can swim because there they are swimming towards us in the river. Next thing we hit some rapids so we had to hold on because they were so strong we almost fell out of the boat. But as we got our balance again we were off.
After a while of paddling the bears still had not given up and my best friend and I were getting tired. So when we started slowing down the bears got closer and next thing there were giant paws grabbing onto the boat. But just then my wife thought of a plan she said we can through things at them and might get them to stop so we tried it.
A Few minutes later there was a bunch of thing floating in the river but no bears chasing us anymore.
Nice, Olivia!
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you used a male as the main character. I also liked "next thing 2 giant bears jump out of the bush".Next time, I think you could name the characters.
Annelise X
I loved your story, it was really interesting. I liked how you described the story. Maybe next time you could name the characters :)
ReplyDeleteFeedback= I think it was a excellent story and there were some great descriptive words.
ReplyDeleteFeed forward= Next time you could add in some more words in the last paragraph